Writing Test Result Sample
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Student Name
Nguyen Tat Thanh
Test Title
Cambridge 19 Test 1
Test Type
Writing Test
Test Date
29 Aug 2025 at 07:51 pm
Time Taken
59 min 28 sec
Examiner Feedback
Your writing shows that you can respond to the tasks, but your ideas are often too limited and underdeveloped. You sometimes drift off-topic or don’t fully answer the question. Grammar and vocabulary are basic, and frequent mistakes make your sentences hard to follow.
To move higher, focus on:
Expanding ideas with examples instead of short points.
Organizing your essay with clear paragraphs.
Using more varied sentence structures and vocabulary.
With practice, you can build stronger answers that feel connected and complete.
Score Criteria
Task Achievement: 5.0
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
Lexical Resource: 4.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 4.0
Task Achievement
Your Strengths:
- You included an overall statement and attempted to identify main trends (for example, that the film club had the largest number of participants and that table tennis and musical performances grew).
- You gave some specific figures to support your points (e.g. approximate numbers for the film club and table tennis).
Development Areas:
- Some of the data were inaccurate or contradictory (for example, inconsistent year references and unclear figures for amateur dramatics), which reduced the reliability of your summary.
- Your overview was brief and lacked clear, well-supported comparisons of the most significant features across the period.
Next Steps:
- You should ensure accuracy by checking the figures and years carefully before writing; you could highlight only the most significant data points to support a clear overview.
- You might plan one concise overview sentence that summarised the main trends and then use two body paragraphs to illustrate and compare specific data.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your Strengths:
- You used a recognisable structure with an introduction, an overall comment, and further detail paragraphs.
- You attempted to use linking phrases to compare trends (for example, using 'by contrast' and 'on the other hand').
Development Areas:
- Paragraphing and sentence sequencing were inconsistent, and some sentences were fragmented or awkward, which interrupted the flow.
- Referencing and cohesion devices were sometimes unclear, which led to repetition and difficulty following specific comparisons.
Next Steps:
- You should plan paragraphing more clearly: one overview paragraph followed by two focused body paragraphs, which will help the reader follow your comparisons.
- You could practise using a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g. however, whereas, meanwhile) and make sure each pronoun or reference clearly points to the correct subject.
Lexical Resource
Your Strengths:
- You used relevant topic vocabulary (e.g. film club, amateur dramatic, table tennis, musical performances).
- You attempted comparative and descriptive language (e.g. increased sharply, rose steadily, declined).
Development Areas:
- There were frequent spelling errors and misspellings (for example 'larghest', 'throughtout', 'perticipants', 'steadly'), which disrupted clarity.
- Word choice was sometimes imprecise or awkward, and the range of vocabulary was limited, reducing variation in expression.
Next Steps:
- You must proofread to correct spelling and common word-formation errors; using a spellchecker or a short checklist before submitting would help.
- You should build a focused vocabulary list for data description and practise synonyms and collocations so you can vary your language more confidently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Your Strengths:
- You produced several simple sentences that conveyed meaning and you attempted some more complex structures.
- You used past and present tenses to describe trends, showing an attempt to vary verb forms.
Development Areas:
- Grammar errors, punctuation mistakes and sentence fragments were frequent and sometimes impeded understanding (for example, unclear clause boundaries and missing words).
- Tense and number consistency were inconsistent in places, which reduced the precision of your descriptions.
Next Steps:
- You should focus on sentence combining and practise constructing clear complex sentences while maintaining grammatical accuracy.
- You might review tense consistency and punctuation rules, and do targeted drills on subject-verb agreement and clause linking to reduce frequent errors.
Question
Your Answer and Corrections
The mentioned line chart illustrates information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 to 2020. Overall, It is noticeable, Film club had a larghest number of participants throughtout the period, while Amateur dramatic declined, table tennis and musical performances both grew, especially Table tennis. In 2020, The Film club had about 65 participants and this figure stayed steady. ending at around 66 in 2020. Martial Art started about 40,fel slightly, but recovered to the same level in 2020. By contrast, amateur dramatic fell gradually from just over 30 in 2020 to under in 10 in 2020. on the other hand , table tennis increased sharply after 2010, reaching more then 50 perticipants in 2020. Musical performances also rose steadly from zero in 2015 to about 20 participants by the end of the period.
Spelling mistakes
Grammatical mistake
Suggestions
centre
Possible spelling mistake. ‘centre’ is British English.
Correction
- center
Sample Answer
The graph illustrates the number of participants engaged in five different activities at a social centre in Melbourne between 2000 and 2020. These activities include film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances. Overall, the film club maintained the highest number of participants throughout the period, whereas musical performances and amateur dramatics experienced significant fluctuations. In 2000, the film club had the highest number of participants at 65, a figure that remained steady until 2010 before slightly increasing to 70 by 2020. Martial arts started at 40 participants in 2000, but this number steadily declined to 30 over the two decades. Conversely, table tennis witnessed a sharp rise in participation, starting at 10 in 2000 and peaking at 35 by 2020. Amateur dramatics initially recorded 20 participants, but this figure dropped to almost zero by 2020. Musical performances experienced rapid growth after 2005, reaching 30 participants in 2020, despite starting at a low point of 5 in 2000. In summary, while the film club remained consistently popular, table tennis and musical performances gained significant traction, contrasting with the decline in martial arts and amateur dramatics.
Score Criteria
Task Response: 5.0
Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0
Lexical Resource: 4.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 4.0
Task Response
Your Strengths:
- You had addressed the task and stated a clear opinion (you strongly agreed that competition was beneficial).
- You had attempted to discuss both views by mentioning benefits of competition and some negative effects.
Development Areas:
- Your ideas were limited and not fully developed with clear, relevant examples and explanation.
- There was some repetition and occasional irrelevance which weakened the overall argument.
Next Steps:
- You should plan and develop each main idea with specific examples and explanation to fully support your position.
- You might try to balance discussion of both views more evenly and finish with a concise, justified conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your Strengths:
- You had used basic paragraphing to separate introduction, body and conclusion.
- You had attempted some linking words to connect ideas.
Development Areas:
- Progression of ideas was often unclear and some sentences were not logically linked.
- Cohesive devices were sometimes misused and there was repetition instead of clear reference.
Next Steps:
- You should plan the essay structure (topic sentence, support, example) before writing to improve logical flow.
- You might focus on using appropriate cohesive devices and clear referencing to avoid repetition.
Lexical Resource
Your Strengths:
- You had used some topic-specific vocabulary (e.g. competition, promotion, students).
- You had attempted to vary word choice rather than repeating a single term all the time.
Development Areas:
- There were frequent spelling and word-formation errors (e.g. ‘modren’, ‘competion’, ‘telend’) that sometimes impeded clarity.
- Some word choices and collocations were inaccurate, which reduced precision of meaning.
Next Steps:
- You should review common word forms and collocations and practise accurate spelling for high-frequency words.
- You might build vocabulary by learning synonyms and their correct usage, then practise them in sentences.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Your Strengths:
- You had attempted a variety of sentence structures, including longer sentences with multiple ideas.
- You had used some basic grammar forms correctly in places.
Development Areas:
- Grammatical errors were frequent (articles, verb forms, subject-verb agreement, punctuation) and sometimes impeded understanding.
- Sentence boundaries and capitalization were often incorrect, causing readability issues.
Next Steps:
- You should practise core grammar points (tenses, articles, agreement) and do focused error correction on your writing.
- You might write timed essays and then revise them for grammar, or get corrective feedback to build accuracy.
Question
Your Answer and Corrections
In this modren era, Competition is the most popular thing in every sector. As a result , some people think that competition at work, at school, and in daily life is good thing, and others demand that believe that we should tey to cooperate more, rather then competing against other. there has positive and negative both thing , and I am strongly agree with the first statement, In this essay, I will discuss both point of view. Nowadays, People are living in modren golden period and all the people have different pattern, But competion is the kind of same psychology, which everyone foster,competition is the essencial thing what is improve peoples life rapidly. For instance, when Students study in school during this time every student have rank as roll and day by day, they try to improve their rank increase, which means they study hard for develop their educational trying to show more better. Furthermore, In corporate department, the competion is same people working hard for survive better life, while, they are runnig in this corporate world for get promotion. On the other hand, there are also some negative thing in competition. In our society, people have defferent thoughts, for that reason most of the time, better people try to dominate other week people whom could not reching in competition Accorting to the Daily Start News paper reportedly In Asia 25% people attemt sucide for failure.further, some of people become destrack from their future goal. In conclusion, In my point of view, competion is the best way to prove people's telend and skill. It is true there are some cons existed in our society, but peoples are trying to become more civilise and on day those negative thing will be disappear.
Spelling mistakes
Grammatical mistake
Suggestions
modren
Possible spelling mistake found.
Correction
- modern
- Modred
Sample Answer
Competition and cooperation are two contrasting approaches to achieving success in life, whether at work, in school, or in daily interactions. While some argue that competition drives progress and excellence, others believe that collaboration fosters harmony and mutual growth. Both perspectives have merit, but I believe a balanced approach is the most effective. On the one hand, competition can be a powerful motivator. It pushes individuals to strive for excellence and achieve their full potential. For instance, in an academic setting, students who compete for top grades are often inspired to work harder and develop critical skills. Similarly, in the workplace, competition can drive innovation and efficiency as employees aim to outperform their peers. However, excessive competition can lead to stress, unethical behavior, and a lack of collaboration, which may ultimately undermine overall productivity. On the other hand, cooperation emphasizes teamwork and mutual support, which are essential for long-term success. In schools, group projects teach students how to share ideas and work together toward a common goal. In professional settings, collaboration encourages knowledge sharing, enhances creativity, and builds stronger relationships among colleagues. For example, tech companies like Google thrive on a culture of collaboration, where teams work together to develop groundbreaking solutions. Nevertheless, cooperation without individual accountability can sometimes result in inefficiency or complacency. In my opinion, the most effective approach combines the benefits of both competition and cooperation. While competition can inspire individuals to excel, cooperation ensures that collective goals are achieved, and relationships are strengthened. For instance, a healthy mix of competition and teamwork in sports often produces the best outcomes, as players push themselves to succeed while supporting their teammates. In conclusion, both competition and cooperation play vital roles in different aspects of life. Striking a balance between the two is key to fostering personal growth, professional success, and societal progress.
